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Life is like a slithering snake
Where deception lies and dreams are fake
Winter comes into the night
You never see the fading light

Try as you might, the darkness falls
As the siren sings her silent calls
Suddenly, you’re  in the wind
Dropping down, it’s you who sinned

Flying far across the sea
dying for you and whom you’ll be
The ever present sound of fate
of silver strands across the gate

Enter Eden, you’re her Eve
The golden bridge, the unmarked weave
Of a patten so small, you can’t comprehend
It rips all apart, and now you must mend

The shattered fragments not understood
Meaningless scrabbles carved into wood
Unjust is the voice who calls out the name
Life is the reason we all take the blame  
©2006-2009 ~Renima
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:iconkeikisboy:
<3

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All around me, I see what weakness had made.
Too much tomorrow, I think I'll take all today.
:iconrenima:
<3 Hee hee

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Friends are like the little marshmallows in hot chocolate, you don't really need them, but they make life more enjoyable.
:iconlolafreak:
I wouldn't be surprised if you had a 100 average in creative writing class.

Beautiful rhythm, especially the stanza that starts with "Enter Eden". And I love the ending. :heart:
:iconrenima:
XD hee hee Everyone likes that, but I thought of innuendos after that! *giggle*

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Friends are like the little marshmallows in hot chocolate, you don't really need them, but they make life more enjoyable.
:iconexanon:
<3 very nicly written, I love it.

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- Valient heros need not speak of their greatness, for true glory and valor are lost in spoken word, and can arise only in the heat of a well fought battle.

You gota see
:iconrenima:
Thank you.

Wow, haven't seen you around in a while.

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Friends are like the little marshmallows in hot chocolate, you don't really need them, but they make life more enjoyable.
:iconexanon:
Ya a lot of things happened since the last time I was around.

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- Valient heros need not speak of their greatness, for true glory and valor are lost in spoken word, and can arise only in the heat of a well fought battle.

You gota see
:iconrenima:
Yeah. same here.

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Friends are like the little marshmallows in hot chocolate, you don't really need them, but they make life more enjoyable.
:iconlolafreak:
:lmao: Now that I think about it, I can see the possibilities...

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